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As I sat with the dunce cap on, I can rememeber the sun pouring through the classrooom window hot upon my backm as the rest of the class dutifully entoned their hail Mary's for my soul, and I played secret games with the destorted raqinbows of light, until Sister noticed and made me stop blinking my eyes so fast.
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I used to long for some Hearst Free Milk Fund milk, in one of those cute little bottles with their red and white tops...
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We often thirsted ater large Coca Cola Diet Cokes, that came in those tall glass bottle with the white pairs of polar bears...
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When I was five years old an still legally blind, I started school in a sight conservvation class in the local public school on 135th Steet and Lenox Avenue...
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From my age of 10 years, when I was still mostly blonde, I began school in a uniforms only class that was at a Private school near the railroad tracks and Police Station...
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